Kia Ora!
This week we were learning about show not tell writing while describing a place we feel proud to stand. The difference between tell writing and show writing is simple. Tell writing is writing that includes no deeper language features, using basic words for describing and over all a pretty plain piece of writing. Show writing is using deeper language features such as similes,metaphors and alliteration. Also in show writing the writer tends to replace words like "fun,pretty,run" to "enjoyable,stunning and sprint" so overall using more complicated words.
For my writing,I am describing Pounawea,a place I visit every year to meet up with some family members for New Years. (If you would like to know more click here!). For me, it was a bit challenging for trying not to tell,but I enjoyed thinking and describing this amazing place! So after some time here is my writing:
Exploring the same pebble road,welcomed by the seagulls squawking louder than a car's engine. Your Hills stand tall,like my ancestors,watching over your wavy blue blanket. The roots from your trees are like veins, drifting through the soil being the source of life,forming a wilderness playground. The rain pouring down,the stomping from gumboots, not knowing when the path will end. The Joy,Smiles and laughter sparks forgotten memories. Every year I return to my place,my place I’m proud to stand,as the ocean waves whisper “Turangawaewae”.
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